Just a little harder to do proof reads when you’re on a kindle touch.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-21 11:46:07It really needs a rewrite. Xxx sex When you get this far continue on with your story as you just dropped it off a cliff the first time. SLO DOWN, take it easy and start over. (countrycadillac)blonde_kidReport 2013-05-21 11:51:51Thanks for the feedback. (countrycadillac)blonde_kidReport 2013-05-21 11:51:51Thanks for the feedback. Take it to the final phase and then end it. Spell check please, and greater story formulation wouldn’t hurt.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-21 06:38:58Take time to proof your stories. You have the idea in the back of your head you just don’t know how to tell your fingers to type it in. 5 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-05-25 10:35:10A Great story Thanks for posting.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-21 12:07:00Where to start ??
