r«1» Don’t just throw a bunch of numbers (bra, height, wieght, dick length), describe stuff. Porn I’m waiting for more, maybe some p.s.a. Send a few over here.READERReport 2005-09-06 10:36:25Good premise, good structure, a little too formulaic. Don’t just throw a bunch of numbers (bra, height, wieght, dick length), describe stuff. Also, and I know this is a personal pet peeve of mine; be a good writer, not a statistician. HE PROBABLY HAS NO LIFE?READERReport 2005-09-06 11:31:28What a slut. Its a good basic story but you have the ability to make it better, keep trying.READERReport 2005-09-06 10:10:54Hot story, loved the lead-in, the action, and accoplishment. If you are going to write a very predictable story, you need to mix things up a little.
