It’s not to often you find a story on this site where you can actually feel the emotion in it.«1» Try leaving it for a couple of months and then proof-reading over it when you’ve forgotten it a bit.anonymous readerReport 2012-03-31 14:01:05Cool story but needs more details next timeanonymous readerReport 2012-02-21 22:44:00a lot of little grammar mistakes, but otherwise a good story. 4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-04-12 18:14:17Your writing is a bit hard to follow, especially with the lengthy run-on sentences. Porn It’s not to often you find a story on this site where you can actually feel the emotion in it.«1» 4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-04-12 18:14:17Your writing is a bit hard to follow, especially with the lengthy run-on sentences.
