try again, the story has potential«12» try again, the story has potential«12» keep writingREADERReport 2006-11-09 19:15:52good story make part 2 longer and more detail. Xxx sex maybe add a teatcher or somthign liek that or one of them can squirt?READERReport 2006-10-28 23:54:18a couple of spelling errors but a good storyREADERReport 2006-09-19 09:31:23hard to follow, jumping back and forth too much. maybe add a teatcher or somthign liek that or one of them can squirt?READERReport 2006-10-28 23:54:18a couple of spelling errors but a good storyREADERReport 2006-09-19 09:31:23hard to follow, jumping back and forth too much. try again, the story has potential«12» keep writingREADERReport 2006-11-09 19:15:52good story make part 2 longer and more detail. keep writingREADERReport 2006-11-09 19:15:52good story make part 2 longer and more detail.
