I hope your future stories are betteral459Report 2013-01-18 15:20:01The plot is interesting but it was like reading a screenplay. It was so disjointed I couldn’t read on. Xxx hot …Mr. MasterBaterReport 2013-01-18 19:54:14This really sucked and made no sense. It was so disjointed I couldn’t read on. …Mr. I hope your future stories are betteral459Report 2013-01-18 15:20:01The plot is interesting but it was like reading a screenplay. I hope your future stories are betteral459Report 2013-01-18 15:20:01The plot is interesting but it was like reading a screenplay. MasterBaterReport 2013-01-18 19:54:14This really sucked and made no sense. 4 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2013-02-06 14:55:50This really sucked. Was not able to finish it.«1» To much narative and descriptive actions.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-17 10:15:38Very disjointed. I hope your future stories are betteral459Report 2013-01-18 15:20:01The plot is interesting but it was like reading a screenplay. To much narative and descriptive
