Examples: then instead of than (they actually have different meanings); “grab my hand” instead of “grabbed my hand”; “pushes me gentle back” should be “pushes me gently back”. However, I loved the theme and the characters. Xxx hot Also, after uploading it’s a good idea to edit again–to put back the spacing that was lost in the upload. I got so tired of translating what you said, into what you must have meant, that I lost interest in the story.senorlongoReport 2011-03-04 23:40:28I have several stories on this site and I’m glad to pass along some of what I have learned from experience. You don’t have to be an English Expert, but you should show some respect for your readers. However, I loved the theme and the characters. I usually spend 25% writing and
