Next, too much forensic evidence, even a mall cop could find your main character. It is a great story but please do a grammar check and read some books on writing techniques for short stories.., All in all, its a 9 on storyline and a 3 on grammar. Xxx sex (exaggerating a bit) I hope your next part is better.anonymous readerReport 2011-11-23 05:42:13Fuck yes , luv the brutetality , take what u want . KUDOS!!! I agree with others your w riting is bad. I agree with others your w riting is bad. I agree with others your w riting is bad. Next, too much forensic evidence, even a mall cop could find your main character.
